Thanks for taking the time to post your thoughts, Doug. I'm not 100% comfortable calling this piece a poem, so you are not alone! It dances in-between genres, and b/c that's how it surfaced & b/c this strange weather and world often leave me feeling "in-between," I left it in this form. I get cranky when I see The New Yorker publishing Leonard Cohen lyrics in its poetry section, though--I think there are distinct differences between a song lyric and a poem. I actually wasn't trying to get my students to write a war poem but was encouraging them to mindfully consider the violence they (sub)consciously notice or even take part in.
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